A sad, sombre tale for you.

The day my Grandfather died. (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1160490174.doc)

I'm trying hard not to think about it ,but now i have it sends a shiver down my spine 96 once a week BLOODY HELL .Nice one though.

This is so funny.Hope others read it.Wish I could base my stories on this kind of humour.

Reminds me of Grandpa Simpson. 'What? Sehhhhhhhhx? Why does it make you so uncomfortable hearing your old man talk about Sehhhx. I had Sehhhx.' :D

Seriously, aside from the ending, which speaks for itself, one thing that did strike me was the handling of the tone. You build the reader's mood up very skillfully, from the Sheff-noir intro and despondent surroundings into the house, where everything comes from the increasingly comic interactions between Davy and Gran. It's a perfectly packaged little story, even things I would normally criticise (such as occasional over-use of adjectives) work within its confines.

It's almost like one long, drawn-out stand-up joke. Food for thought, Mantaspook? ;)

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“Sheff Noir” Love it, I can just see the Wikapedia entry 50 years from now.

Sheff Noir any expression originally coined by Gypsey Hack to describe a disgruntled writers group that originated on the Sheffield Forum, their gritty realistic stories were “darker than Hendersons Relish” [citation needed] and evoked much scholarly debate and laughter, albeit unintentionally.

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Glad you liked it.

I had to chuckle at this one Mantaspook, it just reminded me of my mother-in- law, she was of the same mould, they say “out of the mouth of babes” well I believe it should be “out of the mouth of pensioners”.
This is the first I’ve read of yours, if the rest are similar I have some good reading to look forward to.

Believe me, coyleys........his writings are wonderful...........so........get reading! :hihi:

mantaspook is a "star"......... :thumbsup:

That story is wicked! In both the old and new senses of the word!

thanks for posting that, it is fab