shpoolx   10 #1 Posted June 28, 2014 The first draft is now online. Phone and tablet optimised versions to follow soon. We'd appreciate any feedback. Thanks in advance.  http://www.ashoka1967.com  Ashoka. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
JohnKH Â Â 10 #2 Posted June 28, 2014 Proofreader required FOR SURE! Â Quite a number of greengrocer's apostrophes in there! (e.g. want's ? Harrod's ? - no apostrophe in wants or Harrods). Â And although I am not familiar with your business so can't really comment on whether it feels consistent with the place, I do think that the website has more of a South American feel rather than Indian... But if it works for you, that is all that matters. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
shpoolx   10 #3 Posted June 28, 2014 Thank you JohnKH! We'll get the copy proof read and make the necessary changes. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
Mr Bit   10 #4 Posted June 28, 2014 As a whole looks cool and very modern Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
mlfc   10 #5 Posted June 28, 2014 I know a good proofreader if you don't have one Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
holymoses   10 #6 Posted June 28, 2014 I thought it was a diary at first glance. Then a photographers website. On the home page theres nothing that jumps out to tell me about the resturant. With the pictures of the cows, first thoughts are of milk and diary products. Ive been to the resturant many times but theres nothing on the site I reference that links its to the resturant. I can see what you are trying to achieve with the cultural pictures but the food element is lost. As a prospective customer Id like to see what is the cuisine and resturant are like. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
Marx   10 #7 Posted June 28, 2014 I have to work out what you are. Wholesaler? Archive source, take away, butcher? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
shpoolx   10 #8 Posted June 28, 2014 Thank you for the feedback so far. Back to the drawing board! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
Marx   10 #9 Posted June 29, 2014 (edited) Thank you for the feedback so far. Back to the drawing board!  A good website is always work in progress. Give us a shout if you require any inspiration. Edited June 29, 2014 by Marx spell Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
sharpend   11 #10 Posted July 1, 2014 The copy is all about YOU. Your birthday, your story, your history.  What about the user? Some photographs of what I am going to get rather than what look like photo stock images.  Don't make me open up pdf reader to see the menu - stocks the user in full flight.  where is the traffic going to come from and what do you want them to do when they get to the site? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
Gleadly   11 #11 Posted July 1, 2014 Nice site however you should zoom in on your Google maps as one does want to see all of Sheffield to see your location.  Just a couple of minor points on your Story page. Naturally these were served with chips to customers who'd been happily imbibing or those brave souls who tried this new foreign food.  Remove double space. The delicious curry's were sold to the like Waitrose, Tesco and Harrods of Knightsbridge.  curry's should be curries.  "were sold to the like" needs to be rephrased. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
ClickS1 Â Â 10 #12 Posted July 1, 2014 The menu look's great ill be stopping by soon Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...