sauerkraut Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 I've been away for a while, but here I am again with my Christmas contribution. Be warned, writing it made me cry, but I'd still value constructive criticism on the writing style and so on. Christmas 2005. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 Sauerkraut, I just know how you feel. My Mom died last year and it was our first Christmas without her.Although she was 96 and in a nursing home,we still fetched her every Christmas day.So sad your Dad dying just afterwards(Ive heard of this happening before with partners). Christmas never seems the same again.The thing is youve always got to remember the "Good Christmases" when you were all together. Then enjoy your own Christmas this year with your family,just as your mom & Dad would have wanted you to do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shoeshine Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 It's a well written piece, at an ideal length to portray the subject matter. Poignant yet not overdone at all. The succinct characterisation of family members is just at the right level, leaving the reader to put faces to your brief descriptions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brisbane Posted November 11, 2006 Share Posted November 11, 2006 To say I enjoyed it seems like the wrong words, beautifully written and touches the heart. My tears have already watered the keyboard. I lost my dad when I was 17 so your story rings true in many ways. Lovely piece of work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sauerkraut Posted November 14, 2006 Author Share Posted November 14, 2006 Thank you very much for your sympathetic comments everyone. I hope I haven't raised too many painful memories for those who've had similar experiences. I do appreciate the feedback as it makes the writing more worthwhile somehow. Incidentally, I don't know what kind of brainstorm was going on when I submitted it but the title should have been Christmas 1995, not 2005. The final paragraph doesn't make much sense otherwise. Still, what's 10 years where painful memories are concerned?! Oh and I should perhaps explain that I fictionalised some of the peripheral details and was wondering if I'd over-stereotyped some of the family members so it's good to hear the characters are still believable. I know it's on a sensitive subject but if anyone has read it and doesn't like it I would like to know that too - with reasons of course. It's the only way to improve. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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