PinkxTinks   10 #1 Posted October 22, 2006 Jack The Ripper awoke in the evening and put on his long black coat he sat at his table, inked up his pen, And in the gathering dark he wrote:  "From Hell, From Hell...Oh Mr. Lusk From hottest hell i write Tell the police to stay awake, im on the job tonight  "Ill search the streets and alleyways And find myself a whore Take her where the lights are low And cut her to the core  "Across the throat and up the middle Oh god it feels so great Clip a kidney take it home, Fry it up and eat  "Im not a skipper or leather apron But just a sharp steel fan Im off to work now Dear Sir Boss Catch me if you can!"  I wrote this when i was 11  What do you think? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
pattricia   561 #2 Posted October 22, 2006 I think its great ,can you write any more ? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
fr8neck   10 #3 Posted October 22, 2006 It's surprisingly good.  It seems quite dense with data from the case, for an eleven year old.  Do you still write poetry then?  Or is that it? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
PinkxTinks   10 #4 Posted October 22, 2006 No, i write loads, i wrote some the other day but they are more in detail about various mental illnesses and such Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
pattricia   561 #5 Posted October 22, 2006 No, i write loads, i wrote some the other day but they are more in detail about various mental illnesses and such   How old are you now then, to write about such grown up things.? Surely you havent had that much experience of life. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
PinkxTinks   10 #6 Posted October 22, 2006 Edited <333333333 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
pattricia   561 #7 Posted October 22, 2006 I am 17 and i have been through depression, am trying to recover from anorexia, had obsessive complusive disorder, my mum has had severe depression, i have been through a lot for my age including being a main carer for my disabled family   You are very good at poetry,whatever you have been through.Looks like youve been to "The University of Life". Keep it up, its good for you to put all your thoughts down on paper. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
PinkxTinks   10 #8 Posted October 22, 2006 Yes, it helps, i am going t dig out some old ones and post them on here Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
fr8neck   10 #9 Posted October 22, 2006 Ther's a writers group on here but I can't read their stuff as it's private or something.  You should 'talk' to them. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
PinkxTinks   10 #10 Posted October 22, 2006 I dont understand Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
pattricia   561 #11 Posted October 22, 2006 I dont understand Just carry on posting your poems, they will get read. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
PinkxTinks   10 #12 Posted October 22, 2006 Thanks, do you know how to become a member, like have the password and everything Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...