hazel   11 #1 Posted July 31, 2006 This is also sparetime work  hazel  The Night Workers Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
mikomi   10 #2 Posted July 31, 2006 Hazel.  Elegantly written,I liked it very much. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
hazel   11 #3 Posted July 31, 2006 Mikomi Thanks for the feedback, it's very difficult to view one's own work and if no one says anything, you never know how the reader feels. Pleased you enjoyed it  hazel Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
sauerkraut   10 #4 Posted August 1, 2006 That's a very clever piece of writing. I got completely the wrong idea from the opening sentence and was given a big surprise Ãn the closing sentence - which I assume was the plan! Maybe you could have just said the sound of the phone summoned her back, rather than called her back "to the office" (so that the intrigue is kept right to the end) - but perhaps others more on the ball than I will have twigged by then anyway.  I like the way the descriptive writing really evokes the scene. Descriptions (whether of situations, atmosphere or simply surroundings) are something I always struggle with.  I enjoyed reading it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...
pattricia   574 #5 Posted August 2, 2006 This is very good Hazel, you are getting better with each story. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites Share this content via...