Story: Gerry's Lodger comes to stay .

[pattricia 574]

Mikomi, this is very humerous.I liked it.It held my attention.

[shoeshine 10]

I have decided never to take a lodger in, mikomi.

[42fta 10]

I like the darkness of this, I assume "the lodger" is in his head not his house? I'm jealous; this is the single-viewpoint, introspective style of narrative that I was (am) attempting to achieve but haven't managed to complete, yet.

 

I wonder what the next instalment will bring, will he descend further into madness or will he receive a short sharp shock of reality? Looking forward to finding out!

[mikomi 10]

I like the darkness of this, I assume "the lodger" is in his head not his house? I'm jealous; this is the single-viewpoint, introspective style of narrative that I was (am) attempting to achieve but haven't managed to complete, yet.

 

I wonder what the next instalment will bring, will he descend further into madness or will he receive a short sharp shock of reality? Looking forward to finding out!

 

 

Yes he's in his head or mabe mine. .Yes there's more to come and the end will blow you away i hope.

[mikomi 10]

Gerry's Lodger (A hole in one)

 

Gerrys back

[scribe 10]

It took me a while to read all 3. I take it Gerry is slowly going mad.I hope there is a big ending to this as it deserves one .I have a feeling there is going to be a few more that get a grizzly end also there's a twist in all of this i can smell it .How do you keep the dialogue going it's like two for the price of one.

[pattricia 574]

Very enjoyable.Good dialogue as well.

[Jabberwocky 46]

Beautiful.

 

Theres something very... hard to put into words but, very.... through gritted teeth about it.

 

Love it!

[brisbane 10]

Totally agree, a very enjoyable read and the dialogue is fab!