What do you think of this poem?

[TimmyR 10]

I found this poem on the website http://www.poetry.com.

 

Any comments on the underlying metaphors?

 

Powerful Lyrics

 

Testing the pages,

I feel they are warm,

Lubricated with a transparent layer of oxygen,

I try to look on, seething.

 

Grab my arm!

It falls away like a broken cup handle.

It's OK I have another.

 

Load, reload, heavy load.

 

I say they are Fresh,

But they bow like an inconsiderate child.

 

I here him say:

"Only those who try can fail."

[jayjay 10]

Shakespeare must be spinning in his grave never mind turning.

What utter cr*p.

Sorry for upsetting anyone who finds this poem meaningful

[dawny1 10]

I'm with you jayjay - our daughters letters make more sense!

 

I'm sure it has some deep profound meaning to it but I am not that clever I'm afraid.

 

Lets stick to There was an old woman who swallowed a spider! Thats about my limit.

[viking 10]

Originally posted by jayjay

Shakespeare must be spinning in his grave never mind turning.

What utter cr*p.

Sorry for upsetting anyone who finds this poem meaningful

 

Meaningful I dont think I could make up as much twaddle as that if I tried, but poetry, like red wine, is wasted on me

[LoopyLou 10]

ha ha...

 

That's just what I thought when i read but I didn;t reply because....

 

a) Thought it might show my individual ignorance

(but collective ignorenace is ok!!)

 

 

b) didn't want to upset the writer if he was serious.

 

 

Is he serious???

[x_LoUiSe_x 10]

Originally posted by LoopyLou

ha ha...

 

That's just what I thought when i read but I didn;t reply because....

 

a) Thought it might show my individual ignorance

(but collective ignorenace is ok!!)

 

 

b) didn't want to upset the writer if he was serious.

 

 

Is he serious???

 

same here! i didnt have a clue what it ment so i didnt reply until sum1 else had, didnt want to look a fool if the meaning was obvious! lol

[Guest Cutglass]

what blow is he on???

[Litha 10]

Originally posted by x_LoUiSe_x

same here! i didnt have a clue what it ment so i didnt reply until sum1 else had, didnt want to look a fool if the meaning was obvious! lol

 

at the risk of being berated here i can only think of 1 reply

 

****SNAP****

[jayjay 10]

Come on Tim would you like to enlighten the poor uneducated ,me included

What comment on the meaning of the under-lying metaphors do you have or do you think its crap too?

[muddycoffee 10]

This looks to me like the lyrics from a thrash metal song, although I don't have one in mind. It looks like that kind of style.

 

Transparent layer of oxygen?

does this mean transparent oxygen rather then opaque oxygen? It'd be interesting to see a block of that!

[TimmyR 10]

Ha ha ha ha! I wrote it in order to mock the general rubbishness of the poetry on http://www.poetry.com. There is really the most unbelievable collection of bilge on there. I wrote several others too. For each poem I received a letter saying I had been entered into a prize draw and that I could be published (if I bought the commemorative bowl for $28 ). I believe sarcasm is lost on americans. Here's another seeing as the first was received so well:

 

Limphatic Blisks

 

I have no tree, falling free.

It is a wondrous plank.

Where the piece?

How, the blow mowers plow so slow.

Whenceforth my lady, I have no tree.

The tree is so plain.

Keeping the plentitude gravely.

It is a wondrous plank.

The cotton growers play like a morph.

Keeping slow, the blinkered masseees.

I have no tree.

The last of my pleas is to slow the masseees.

Repeat until tired.

 

 

They're all mad!!!!

 

Tim

[owdlad 10]

I just thought it was a boad of lollocks

 

>edit> the second is as big a boad of lollocks as the first :D