Daveybee

I'll have a look at that. Thanks

I have made all the other poems available for all to view now. Thanks for your comments, I would love to see my poems used in the classroom. I see most of them being used to encourage students to use their minds and challenge opinions that are passed to them from the media and other accepted influences.

Ron, I'm going to take in your words overnight.

Never really considered writing stories and to be honest I would not know where to start. Thank you for the kind words.

Not really my thing, but thanks for the suggestion.

This maybe the last poem that I post on here, as I think that the feedback has been very poor, I had hope for far more. Though I do thank and value the few comments that I have been given. This is inspired by the few, thank you.

Halibut, Thanks for your comments I've given them thought overnight and I think it's something that I'll play around with in the future.

Gone to Leeds

Flown away

Taken poems of here not worth the time sadly, but this Sheffield.

With thought I think your right Ron. I did choose to slow the tempo at the end and was very happy that I was able too I think that I'll post the poem for all to see, I can't really understand why it should be locked away for the select. Hopefully I'll get more feedback TimmyR

http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1267517955.doc I'm not getting as much feedback as I expected from a site such as this. So I thought that I would try this poem that is not controversial. (Well I don't it is). I would like to improve my work, which is my reason for being on here. So please feel free to challenge what and how I write. Or if you all think that I'm that good then tell the Queen that I should be the next Laureate.

Ron, I'm pleased that you enjoy my work, the opinions and debate are for the reader. As to being subtle, is life subtle?

It's not meant to be pretty.

Let me know when she's making one and I'll have your share.