This story is potentially quite large, possibly nine chapters, they will be uploaded at 8PM or thereabouts to this thread most Wednesdays & Fridays during December.

The shocking final chapter, which may require an 18 certificate, will be uploaded on Christmas Eve.

All feedback welcome.

I know where this story is going but you are very welcome to speculate what you think may happen. As I am writing this story ‘on the fly’ I may even incorporate some of your ideas into the story. Enjoy!

Chapters 1 & 2 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1165008852.doc)(1-12-06)

Chapter 3 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1165439102.doc)(6-12-06)

Chapter 4 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1165607881.doc)(8-12-06)

Chapter 5 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166041174.doc)(13-12-06)

Chapter 6 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166564762.doc)(19-12-06)

Chapter 7 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166648869.doc)(20-12-06)

Chapter 8 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166903285.doc)(23-12-06)

Chapter 9 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166985615.doc)(24-12-06)

Hi ya Mantaspook

First of all, let me say I feel like a pupil commenting on a tutors work, but after all that’s what this club is for.

Chapter 2

It’s really good, I fell into it, I suspect a novel brewing here.
Had chapter 2 been the intro of a book I had just picked up off the shelf, I would have bought it.
Roll on Wednesday.

Chapter 1

Well I’m not sure; after reading it a couple of times and got the gist, not so easy reading for a chapter 1, not your best “me thinks” (sorry for doing a Simon cowell).

Speculation

When considering Chapter 1 and the last line of Chapter 2, I would say something on the lines of mutant Yellow Jack.

Thanks for your comments Coyleys, chapter one should fall into place as the story progresses. In the meantime Chapter 3 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1165439102.doc)has now been uploaded to the original post.

All feedback and speculation welcome.

I think I should be getting a password... :o :D

I wondered how long it would be before he turned up.... :hihi:

Chapter 4 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1165607881.doc)added 8-12-2006.

It’s certainly a page turner.
I’m just wondering when Howard Keel will make an appearance.:hihi:

Mantaspook, it's great!

You certainly know your business when it comes to writing, don't you?

I can't wait for the next instalment, but I'll just have to, won't I? :)

Chapter 5 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166041174.doc)uploaded 13-12-2006

Next Fridays chapter may be late due to circumstances beyond my control.

And a pub.

Loved-it!


Can't-wait-for-more.

I-would-love-to-be-able-to-write-like-that-Mantaspook!

How-long-have-you-been-writing?

Chloe


Sorry-about-typing.....if-no-one-has-seen-my-other-posts-my-laptop-is-broken.

I think I should be getting a password... :o :D

Don't be daft Meaks! You should be getting a fee for the use of your name! :hihi:

This is turning into a really interesting exercise, as I’m hoping to get the story completed for Christmas Eve I’ve really got to discipline myself and get the pages written down, despite all the other time pressures and whether I want to or not!

I’m also getting an insight into what an author must feel when a deadline approaches.

I believe the technical term is ‘blind panic.’

Chapter 6 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166564762.doc) has been uploaded 19-12-2006, all feedback welcome, what do you think of the rhythm of the words in the boat scene? Send you to sleep?

Has anybody an idea how this is going to end yet? :smile: - and of course in a story of this nature you’ve got to end every chapter on a cliff hanger…

Chapter 7 will be uploaded tomorrow at 8PM...(or thereabouts) :)

Chapter 7 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166648869.doc) uploaded 20-12-2006.

Sorry its late, Just got back from Christmas shopping :cry:

{Note to self : don't write a serial story at Christmas again.}

Chapter 8 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166903285.doc) added 23-12-2006. - Getting a bit gory now :)

Tomorrows final chapter will be uploaded at 7PM.

I've not read any of them yet Mantaspook, waiting for them all to be there and then will have a look, can't wait to read them. The feedback is brilliant!:)

Might not get a chance for the last installment till Wednesday. Either way bring it on! This is a sterling effort dude.

Chapter 9 (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1166985615.doc) added 24-12-2006. Now its getting a lot gory. :)

To all the readers of this story I hope you enjoyed it & may I wish you all a merry Christmas & a happy new year.

I find that any comment I could make, other than "oustanding" would truly be superfluous. :)

You have an outstanding talent, and many thanks for completeing the story to the deadline you wished to achieve on the Original thread you started earlier this month. :thumbsup:

All I can say Manta is Brilliant.
It’s just a pity it had to end “or has it”
:thumbsup:

Rumours of a missing chapter Eight-and-three-quarters, although unsubstantiated, are completely true. January the 21st.