My first writing. (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1163459184.doc)

Yes, I read your first writing attempt redbee. You have a very good command of written English, and a lot of the things you say I agree with.Im sure Shoeshine, will be very pleased with your first attempt.. :thumbsup:

thank you very much .i appreciate your opinion.

It's a minor point really but I thought I'd mention I found it a bit hard on the eyes: all the colour and capitals!

I'm impressed with your command of the English language though. I've lived in Germany for 9 years but have not yet attempted any creative writing in German. You may have inspired me to try sometime!

i do agree with you,for some people is a bit uncomfortable.i just got used with using capital letters and i like colour a lot .sorry about that i didn`t want to play with your eyes.thank you for reading it!

i do agree with you,for some people is a bit uncomfortable.i just got used with using capital letters and i like colour a lot .sorry about that i didn`t want to play with your eyes.thank you for reading it!


I just wish English people could speak your language as well as you speak ours.We are expecting some poetry soon from you. :thumbsup:

I just wish English people could speak your language as well as you speak ours.We are expecting some poetry soon from you. :thumbsup:
I think tonight i ll put them on the site.the first time is a bit scarry.but now i think i am fine .:)

WOW redbee........

I have had a quick look at your work on the Server.

You're quite good with the English Language.

I have edited the first link on your opening post and replaced it with the your revised one, which presents your text in a more easily read format.

I shall read the article in full this evening and make comments about it. :thumbsup:

Is your writing ,just of what you see around you or is it because you feel women are thought to be the weaker sex ,thus dominated by men .Please don't scream at me .

why i would scream?.i was expected a reply like this from men outhere.no ,i don `t think we are weak at all ,even if we all have sometimes moments when we need someone next to us.is just a point of view .nothing sexiest ,just a way of seeing things from a woman point of view in a extreme way.is it meant to be a easy girly writing ,nothing sexiest .i don `t want to make anyone feel uncomfortable.

Is your writing ,just of what you see around you or is it because you feel women are thought to be the weaker sex ,thus dominated by men .Please don't scream at me .

It's OK scribe......you can come out of hiding now! :hihi:

Ugh! Ugh!......pattricia will be on the warpath with you tonight! :thumbsup:

It's OK scribe......you can come out of hiding now! :hihi:

Ugh! Ugh!......pattricia will be on the warpath with you tonight! :thumbsup:
No, Im just waiting for Jabberwocky to read it. :D What is stamped on his head ? :gag:

:D that was a nice one

why i would scream?.i was expected a reply like this from men outhere.no ,i don `t think we are weak at all ,even if we all have sometimes moments when we need someone next to us.is just a point of view .nothing sexiest ,just a way of seeing things from a woman point of view in a extreme way.is it meant to be a easy girly writing ,nothing sexiest .i don `t want to make anyone feel uncomfortable.

When someone writes a piece i find it interesting to know where the inspiration comes from .Yes it was extreme but well done .
Got to go now .I have to do the ironing before the wife gets back from the pub .:hihi:

No, Im just waiting for Jabberwocky to read it. :D What is stamped on his head ? :gag:
Jabberwocky cant wait to read it.
But Jabberwockys computer is being naughty again and wont let him open the page.


Im going to take a hammer to it one of these days.

Jabberwocky cant wait to read it.
But Jabberwockys computer is being naughty again and wont let him open the page.


Im going to take a hammer to it one of these days.


You dont know what you are missing.!! :D

When someone writes a piece i find it interesting to know where the inspiration comes from .Yes it was extreme but well done .
Got to go now .I have to do the ironing before the wife gets back from the pub .:hihi:
:) i think i am quite bossy as a girlfriend ,but i never let my man iron anything which is mine,but i put him to take care of my laundry .

:) i think i am quite bossy as a girlfriend ,but i never let my man iron anything which is mine,but i put him to take care of my laundry .
redbee, have you read Jabberwockys Limerick thread yet ? Hes a master at it.! :hihi:

redbee, have you read Jabberwockys Limerick thread yet ? Hes a master at it.! :hihi:
yes i did .i made a small contribution too.yes ,i have to admit he is good .so good that i need a dictionary to look for the meaning for some words .

yes i did .i made a small contribution too.yes ,i have to admit he is good .so good that i need a dictionary to look for the meaning for some words .
I didnt know you had done one redbee, I will go and look at it now. Yes get your dictionary out for Jabberwockys meanings.Dont blush though. :D

I didnt know you had done one redbee, I will go and look at it now. Yes get your dictionary out for Jabberwockys meanings.Dont blush though. :D
it s to small to be noticed .

You have a lot to learn about Elglish humour,and even more so about mine
watch out for The Adult Christmas tale It's coming soon.:hihi:

You have a lot to learn about Elglish humour,and even more so about mine
watch out for The Adult Christmas tale It's coming soon.:hihi:
i know.i need practice and time,i ll get there,and we ll see who makes fun of whom?:)

You have a lot to learn about Elglish humour,and even more so about mine
watch out for The Adult Christmas tale It's coming soon.:hihi:Yes, redbee, English people, have a very funny sense of humour. Sometimes we sound serious, when we are in fact joking.(I read your Limerick,at least youve done one, I havent ! ) :thumbsup:

You have a lot to learn about Elglish humour,and even more so about mine
watch out for The Adult Christmas tale It's coming soon.:hihi:

And my spelling (ENGLISH )

i know.i need practice and time,i ll get there,and we ll see who makes fun of whom?:)

:hihi: :hihi: :hihi: :hihi:

And my spelling (ENGLISH )
some people get better in a specific area ,if they are learning from people who are at the top.i am better when i practice ,and even i made 50 mistakes ,i ll know the next time i ll make only 49.it will take me another 40 years to get a vocabulary like his.:)

some people get better in a specific area ,if they are learning from people who are at the top.i am better when i practice ,and even i made 50 mistakes ,i ll know the next time i ll make only 49.it will take me another 40 years to get a vocabulary like his.:)


You are not doing too bad at all.You are a welcome change on Sheffield Forum. :thumbsup:

You are not doing too bad at all.You are a welcome change on Sheffield Forum. :thumbsup:
thanks.i feel very welcome here.because you all been very nice with me.in my country we have a saying that in a world full of people with one eye,the one who is blind is a master.the same here in a forum ,full of people very good at writing ,i am the master because i am not good enough.anyway there are good,and very good writers here ,some at the top ,some at the very bottom like scribe:hihi: .but yes ,will be a change i will replace scribe ,he stayed to much at the bottom.:hihi:

thanks.i feel very welcome here.because you all been very nice with me.in my country we have a saying that in a world full of people with one eye,the one who is blind is a master.the same here in a forum ,full of people very good at writing ,i am the master because i am not good enough.anyway there are good,and very good writers here ,some at the top ,some at the very bottom like scribe:hihi: .but yes ,will be a change i will replace scribe ,he stayed to much at the bottom.:hihi:


Well, youve got a nice way of putting things. Very new, and refreshing. :thumbsup:

Thank you i will take that as a compliment .I like being on the bottom and have no desire to go on top it takes far to much work to stay there .;)

too late the place is already taken:)

too late the place is already taken:)


You are getting smart & quick with your answers. :thumbsup:

You are getting smart & quick with your answers. :thumbsup:
i am a very fast person ,i talk fast ,think fast ,move fast.:)

Bineţe Redbee!

I enjoyed reading your piece and look forward to others on the forum.

Bineţe Redbee!

I enjoyed reading your piece and look forward to others on the forum.
binete?:) this sound like a romanian word

You probably know what it means (if the online dictionary I used is to be believed)!

Just a word to make you feel at home.

You probably know what it means (if the online dictionary I used is to be believed)!

Just a word to make you feel at home.
that s so nice of you ,thank you very much .i believe that my home is where my familyi is.sometimes here i feel very homy.especially when i see english people how assertive are.this is something that i admire at this nation,they have that kind of maturity to approach different nationalities,i mean people ,and listen to them ,they really respect their opinion,they see the person and not the origin .
multumesc=thank you again

I can't access the page due to posting restrictions as a newbie, could you provide some examples in regular message space?

Best Regards
Sean

I can't access the page due to posting restrictions as a newbie, could you provide some examples in regular message space?

Best Regards
Sean

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