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coyleys
25-10-2006, 23:18
Hi everybody,

I have just got my password, and so can have a read and possibly comment, not that I’m qualified to comment.

At this moment I have very little to offer regarding stories, but I will get my head down and see if I can conjure up some creative inspiration.

The only thing on offer at the moment is some excerpts from my school day memories, which some of you may have already had a read, as I have posted some on SF, looking for some constructive criticism.

Anyway have a butcher’s and tell me the worst.

Now we go back to 1964. (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1161817538.doc)

There is more on my home page, if you are so inclined.
Thanks
Mick

Jabberwocky
25-10-2006, 23:33
Excellent stuff!
You just blew half of us right out of the water with that story. Im looking forward to readng more from you!

Jabberwocky
25-10-2006, 23:36
Im going to enjoy your website too, a quick skim through it was fascinating and I agree about everybody wtiting a book of their life. Most of the stuff I write here is about that.

Mantaspook
26-10-2006, 09:51
Hi Coyleys,

Well, I’ve had a butchers at your story and I thought it was really good, a nice warm nostalgic tale told at the right pace with just the right amount of humour. Well done sir!

Also 10 extra credits for mentioning Henderson’s Relish – that always goes down well on the forum. :)

I’ve also had a brief foray onto your website, the “Friday the 13th in Africa” clip had me in stitches, when I have more time I’ll definitely make a return visit.

Please keep posting you stories on here – I’m already looking forward to your next one.

shoeshine
26-10-2006, 09:52
Hiya coyleys, and welcome to the Group.

I've just had a quick glance at your first contribution and will read it in full later today. :thumbsup:

Like Jabberwocky, I had a peep at your website some days ago ( at the point you requested a password.......Oops! :o you didn't know that did you? :hihi:) and although it was only a quick glance, I was very impressed with it. I expect to give it a good lookover during the coming week! :)

shoeshine
26-10-2006, 15:11
Well coyleys, as promised, I've read it. And I love it.

You capture the life and times within a family to a tee. And we can tell your one of us too.....a reight gud Northern family tha's got! :hihi:

brisbane
26-10-2006, 20:11
Not had chance to look yet but looking forward to reading it soon!:)

pattricia
26-10-2006, 20:47
Loved it.Reminded me of Jabberwockys style. Seems very much a 60s story,so I enjoyed that. We look forward to more.:thumbsup:

shoeshine
26-10-2006, 21:06
Loved it.Reminded me of Jabberwockys style. Seems very much a 60s story,so I enjoyed that. We look forward to more.:thumbsup:

He's too good for me and you pattricia, in't he? :hihi:

pattricia
26-10-2006, 21:09
He's too good for me and you pattricia, in't he? :hihi:
Ah, yes, the writing just seems to flow(wish it did with me) See you got your old Avatar back! :thumbsup:

sauerkraut
27-10-2006, 08:03
My favourite bit was the reference to the Irish goldfish! Very cleverly understated...nice touch!

The story certainly seems to prove the adage that some of the best writing is about subjects the writer has personally experienced.

PinkxTinks
03-11-2006, 14:59
Your new to it???
That is amazing