Jack The Ripper awoke in the evening and put on his long black coat
he sat at his table, inked up his pen,
And in the gathering dark he wrote:

"From Hell, From Hell...Oh Mr. Lusk
From hottest hell i write
Tell the police to stay awake, im on the job tonight

"Ill search the streets and alleyways
And find myself a whore
Take her where the lights are low
And cut her to the core

"Across the throat and up the middle
Oh god it feels so great
Clip a kidney take it home,
Fry it up and eat

"Im not a skipper or leather apron
But just a sharp steel fan
Im off to work now Dear Sir Boss
Catch me if you can!"

I wrote this when i was 11

What do you think?

I think its great ,can you write any more ?

It's surprisingly good.

It seems quite dense with data from the case, for an eleven year old.

Do you still write poetry then?

Or is that it?

No, i write loads, i wrote some the other day but they are more in detail about various mental illnesses and such

No, i write loads, i wrote some the other day but they are more in detail about various mental illnesses and such


How old are you now then, to write about such grown up things.? Surely you havent had that much experience of life.

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I am 17 and i have been through depression, am trying to recover from anorexia, had obsessive complusive disorder, my mum has had severe depression, i have been through a lot for my age including being a main carer for my disabled family


You are very good at poetry,whatever you have been through.Looks like youve been to "The University of Life". Keep it up, its good for you to put all your thoughts down on paper.

Yes, it helps, i am going t dig out some old ones and post them on here

Ther's a writers group on here but I can't read their stuff as it's private or something.

You should 'talk' to them.

I dont understand

I dont understand
Just carry on posting your poems, they will get read.

Thanks, do you know how to become a member, like have the password and everything

Thanks, do you know how to become a member, like have the password and everything
Yes, Jabberwocky will help you, and tell you what to do. Listen I dont usually like poetry, but this made me sit up. ! :thumbsup:

WOW!!! Thank you, ill take that as a huge compliment, i really do, thanks sweetheart, you seem real lovely

WOW!!! Thank you, ill take that as a huge compliment, i really do, thanks sweetheart, you seem real lovely
I know good poetry when I see it.Doesnt have to be rhyming and in straight lines,but must have soul.

Thanks, that means so much to me

Oh...and is there any rules about posting poems about mental illnesses such as anorexia on here? just wondered because i can see myself getting addicted to this site and i dont want to get thrown off lol

Thanks, that means so much to me


Get writing then, and join The Writers Group on this forum.

Yes, i am waiting for a password from shoeshine
This will certainly encourage me to post more poems and start writing much more

Oh...and is there any rules about posting poems about mental illnesses such as anorexia on here? just wondered because i can see myself getting addicted to this site and i dont want to get thrown off lol
I honestly wouldnt think so, after all you have to write about what you know best. Theres not many people have experience of those things at your age,mate, I was out dancing & living it up . :D

HAHA, i have lived already lol, i am determined to make the rest of my life just like that haha, thats why i am out all the time, i guess its time to live for me haha

HAHA, i have lived already lol, i am determined to make the rest of my life just like that haha, thats why i am out all the time, i guess its time to live for me haha


Join us on The Writers part,we are all mad, especially Jabberwocky.He will make you laugh,and thats what you need.

HEHE i will do as soon as i get he password

HEHE i will do as soon as i get he password

I have asked JoeP to send you a password PinkxTinks.

I love your poem.

May I suggest you await the password before posting more of your work on this "Open" Section.........on the special Server your work and "First Rights" Copyright will be protected. They may perhaps be profitable to you in the future doing it that way. :)

Loved the poem, really good!:thumbsup:

Thanks, very nice of you to say so

Thanks, very nice of you to say so


Have you got any more poems to post ?

yes but i am not sure how to post them in the right format thing
you know the download link, i dont know how to do that

yes but i am not sure how to post them in the right format thing
you know the download link, i dont know how to do that

You are not the only member of the Writing Group who has found it puzzling, PinxTinks. The confusion can be explained quite easily though.

Fear not, I will PM you with basic instructions later today. I have to get my Flu jab and do a bit of shopping this afternoon. I will send you a PM as soon as possible.

At the age of eleven, Wow! you have a gift.
At that age I had trouble writing, let alone poetry, and the only reading I did was the chronicles of Dennis the Menace "The Beano" though I have to admit I did struggle somewhat with the big words.

Have you worked out how to download yet ? Complicated isnt it ? Hope this doesnt stop this new young writer from giving us more. :thumbsup: