View Full Version : Story: 'Explorations' - my first offering


absynthfairy
13-08-2006, 06:24 PM
Hi guys. This isn't a childrens story - although I was only 18 when I wrote it if that counts!

I wrote this short story for my mock english A level exam - haven't a clue where it came from and haven't written another quite like it since. I was accused of cheating in the exam because my teachers couldn't believe I'd written it under timed conditions but I'm just happy my muse was with me that day :)

I'd really appreciate your feedback - often toyed with trying to get it published somewhere....

Explorations (http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1155486231.doc)

Thanks :)

Jabberwocky
13-08-2006, 06:27 PM
You were only 18 when you wrote THAT?

Id do more than try to publish it as a story, that would be good set to music like a song.

Loved it, it gave me goosebumps and it takes a lot to give this cynical old fart goosebumps!

absynthfairy
13-08-2006, 06:29 PM
Ahh thanks - I wasn't expecting such instant feedback! I can't explain it - it literally just came to me...We were just given a bunch of titles and told to write a story....

I'd love to do something with it....just don't know what...

Jabberwocky
13-08-2006, 06:30 PM
Music, for gods sake try to get someone to add music and turn it into a song.
I cant wait to hear other peoples opinions of this.

absynthfairy
13-08-2006, 06:32 PM
Ok - well I'm open to ideas, lets hope lots of people read it:)

*feels all warm inside*

shoeshine
13-08-2006, 07:12 PM
Beautifully written, and staggeringly well composed. What a wonderful imagination you display in this piece of work. Quite surreal, but yet very poetic in style :thumbsup:

Mantaspook
13-08-2006, 09:38 PM
That is one beautiful, imaginative piece of work.

If it ever was set to music as per Jabberwocky’s suggestion the video would only need to be a black and white film of those words etched in granite and a pull zoom to reveal the gravestone at the end.

Very poignant, I don’t know how your teachers rated it but I thought it was EXCELLENT.

brisbane
13-08-2006, 09:45 PM
Brilliant! Loved it from the start to the end, just wanted to keep reading.:)

absynthfairy
14-08-2006, 03:15 PM
Thanks everyone for taking the time to read my little tale...I really appreciate it...:)

Lindseyw
14-08-2006, 03:17 PM
I can never read these as it always asks for a password !!!

How do I get me one ?

absynthfairy
14-08-2006, 03:31 PM
You have to be a member of the group to get a password - you should PM shoeshine - he's the boss:)

shoeshine
14-08-2006, 05:26 PM
I can never read these as it always asks for a password !!!

How do I get me one ?

I have PM'd you this afternoon Lindseyw.:thumbsup: